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Some people think that work is the most important thing of people’s life. Without the success of career, life becomes meaningless. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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 is believed to be
one
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 of the most significant things among other aspects of human
life
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, leading to wrong
perception
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 that
life
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 becomes meaningless if
success
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 could not be obtained. From my own
perspective
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, I just
advocate
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 some extents of the given
statement
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 with, there is a wide
range
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 of reasons that
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one
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life
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success
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work
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 brings about the
sense
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 of
achievement
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accomplishment
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. The plain
truth
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 is that people usually feel more happy and satisfied if they are recognised and
this
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 can be gained only when they are working.
In
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addition
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,
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work
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 is crucial since it helps people to make ends meet. As
both
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 lucrative and low-paid
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have
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work
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 to meet basic living requirements or even be affordable to
purchase
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instance
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, a recent
research
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 showed that 80
percent
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 of family divorced due to their difficult financial situations, leading to poor
life
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Therefore
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work
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role
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life
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.
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hand
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, there are more desirable goals rather than a successful
life
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life
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. A vast
majority
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 of people perceive a meaningful
life
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 as having their families and close friends. The plain
truth
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 is that relationships with our family and friends are actually
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keeping
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job
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Moreover
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health
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 is another worth-mentioning
factor
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. In
fact
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, if people have a good
health
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 or
best immune
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the best immune system
system
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, their
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life
the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)
lifetime
time
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 is likely to be filled with human well-being.
By
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contrast
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, a successful
person
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 with a
cancer
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 or a fatal
disease
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 might have the negative
outlook
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 in their lives as they have no
time
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. As aforementioned explanations, while it is true that
success
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 makes
life
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 more wonderful, truly important
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things in
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life
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such
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 as
health
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 and relationships are actually vital which
success
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 cannot bring about.
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Work
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 is believed to be
one
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 of the most significant things among other aspects of human
life
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, leading to wrong
perception
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 that
life
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 becomes meaningless if
success
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 could not be obtained. From my own
perspective
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, I just
advocate
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 some extents of the given
statement
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.
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range
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 of reasons that
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one
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’s
life
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.
First
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,
success
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 in
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workk
activity directed toward making or doing something
work
 brings about the
sense
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 of
achievement
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accomplishment
Use synonyms
. The plain
truth
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 is that people usually feel more happy and satisfied if they are recognised and
this
Linking Words
 can be gained only when they are working.
In
Linking Words
addition
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,
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work
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 is crucial since it helps people to make ends meet. As
both
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 lucrative and low-paid
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have
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has
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work
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 to meet basic living requirements or even be affordable to
purchase
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 what they planned to have.
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instance
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, a recent
research
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 showed that 80
percent
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 of family divorced due to their difficult financial situations, leading to poor
life
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quality
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 and unhappy.
Therefore
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,
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work
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role
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 in
one
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’s
life
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.
On the other
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hand
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, there are more desirable goals rather than a successful
life
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 to attain in our
life
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. A vast
majority
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 of people perceive a meaningful
life
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 as having their families and close friends. The plain
truth
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 is that relationships with our family and friends are actually
keep
Suggestion
keeping
 us going and happy even we are
failed
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failing
 or
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caught or fixed
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job
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a job
.
Moreover
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,
health
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 is another worth-mentioning
factor
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. In
fact
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, if people have a good
health
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 or
best immune
Suggestion
the best immune system
system
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, their
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life
the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)
lifetime
time
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 is likely to be filled with human well-being.
By
Linking Words
contrast
Use synonyms
, a successful
person
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 with a
cancer
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 or a fatal
disease
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 might have the negative
outlook
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 in their lives as they have no
time
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. As aforementioned explanations, while it is true that
success
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 makes
life
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 more wonderful, truly important
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Suggestion
things in
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life
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health
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 and relationships are actually vital which
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 cannot bring about.
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Work
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 is believed to be
one
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 of the most significant things among other aspects of human
life
Use synonyms
, leading to wrong
perception
Use synonyms
 that
life
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 becomes meaningless if
success
Use synonyms
 could not be obtained. From my own
perspective
Use synonyms
, I just
advocate
Use synonyms
 some extents of the given
statement
Use synonyms
.
To begin
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 with, there is a wide
range
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 of reasons that
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work
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 is important for
one
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’s
life
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.
First
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,
success
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 in
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work
Use synonyms
 brings about the
sense
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 of
achievement
Use synonyms
accomplishment
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. The plain
truth
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 is that people usually feel more happy and satisfied if they are recognised and
this
Linking Words
 can be gained only when they are working.
In
Linking Words
addition
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,
Use synonyms
workk
activity directed toward making or doing something
work
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 is crucial since it helps people to make ends meet. As
both
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 lucrative and low-paid
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work
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have
Suggestion
has
 to
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work
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 to meet basic living requirements or even be affordable to
purchase
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 what they planned to have.
For
Linking Words
instance
Use synonyms
, a recent
research
Use synonyms
 showed that 80
percent
Use synonyms
 of family divorced due to their difficult financial situations, leading to poor
life
Use synonyms
quality
Use synonyms
 and unhappy.
Therefore
Linking Words
,
Use synonyms
work
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 plays an important
role
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 in
one
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’s
life
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.
On the other
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hand
Use synonyms
, there are more desirable goals rather than a successful
life
Use synonyms
 to attain in our
life
Use synonyms
. A vast
majority
Use synonyms
 of people perceive a meaningful
life
Use synonyms
 as having their families and close friends. The plain
truth
Use synonyms
 is that relationships with our family and friends are actually
keep
Suggestion
keeping
 us going and happy even we are
failed
Suggestion
failing
 or
stucked
caught or fixed
stuck
 in
Use synonyms
job
Suggestion
a job
.
Moreover
Linking Words
,
health
Use synonyms
 is another worth-mentioning
factor
Use synonyms
. In
fact
Use synonyms
, if people have a good
health
Use synonyms
 or
best immune
Suggestion
the best immune system
system
Use synonyms
, their
Use synonyms
life
the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)
lifetime
time
Use synonyms
 is likely to be filled with human well-being.
By
Linking Words
contrast
Use synonyms
, a successful
person
Use synonyms
 with a
cancer
Use synonyms
 or a fatal
disease
Use synonyms
 might have the negative
outlook
Use synonyms
 in their lives as they have no
time
Use synonyms
. As aforementioned explanations, while it is true that
success
Use synonyms
 makes
life
Use synonyms
 more wonderful, truly important
Use synonyms
thingsin
Suggestion
things in
Use synonyms
life
Accept comma addition
life, such
such
Linking Words
 as
health
Use synonyms
 and relationships are actually vital which
success
Use synonyms
 cannot bring about.
Use synonyms
Work
Use synonyms
 is believed to be
one
Use synonyms
 of the most significant things among other aspects of human
life
Use synonyms
, leading to wrong
perception
Use synonyms
 that
life
Use synonyms
 becomes meaningless if
success
Use synonyms
 could not be obtained. From my own
perspective
Use synonyms
, I just
advocate
Use synonyms
 some extents of the given
statement
Use synonyms
.
To begin
Linking Words
 with, there is a wide
range
Use synonyms
 of reasons that
Use synonyms
work
Use synonyms
 is important for
one
Use synonyms
’s
life
Use synonyms
.
First
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,
success
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 in
Use synonyms
work
Use synonyms
 brings about the
sense
Use synonyms
 of
achievement
Use synonyms
accomplishment
Use synonyms
. The plain
truth
Use synonyms
 is that people usually feel more happy and satisfied if they are recognised and
this
Linking Words
 can be gained only when they are working.
In
Linking Words
addition
Use synonyms
,
Use synonyms
work
Use synonyms
 is crucial since it helps people to make ends meet. As
both
Use synonyms
 lucrative and low-paid
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activity directed toward making or doing something
work
have
Suggestion
has
 to
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work
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 to meet basic living requirements or even be affordable to
purchase
Use synonyms
 what they planned to have.
For
Linking Words
instance
Use synonyms
, a recent
research
Use synonyms
 showed that 80
percent
Use synonyms
 of family divorced due to their difficult financial situations, leading to poor
life
Use synonyms
quality
Use synonyms
 and unhappy.
Therefore
Linking Words
,
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work
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 plays an important
role
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 in
one
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’s
life
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.
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hand
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, there are more desirable goals rather than a successful
life
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 to attain in our
life
Use synonyms
. A vast
majority
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 of people perceive a meaningful
life
Use synonyms
 as having their families and close friends. The plain
truth
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 is that relationships with our family and friends are actually
keep
Suggestion
keeping
 us going and happy even we are
failed
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failing
 or
stucked
caught or fixed
stuck
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Use synonyms
job
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a job
.
Moreover
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,
health
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 is another worth-mentioning
factor
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. In
fact
Use synonyms
, if people have a good
health
Use synonyms
 or
best immune
Suggestion
the best immune system
system
Use synonyms
, their
Use synonyms
life
the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)
lifetime
time
Use synonyms
 is likely to be filled with human well-being.
By
Linking Words
contrast
Use synonyms
, a successful
person
Use synonyms
 with a
cancer
Use synonyms
 or a fatal
disease
Use synonyms
 might have the negative
outlook
Use synonyms
 in their lives as they have no
time
Use synonyms
. As aforementioned explanations, while it is true that
success
Use synonyms
 makes
life
Use synonyms
 more wonderful, truly important
Use synonyms
thingsin
Suggestion
things in
Use synonyms
life
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life, such
such
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 as
health
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 and relationships are actually vital which
success
Use synonyms
 cannot bring about.
Use synonyms
Work
Use synonyms
 is believed to be
one
Use synonyms
 of the most significant things among other aspects of human
life
Use synonyms
, leading to wrong
perception
Use synonyms
 that
life
Use synonyms
 becomes meaningless if
success
Use synonyms
 could not be obtained. From my own
perspective
Use synonyms
, I just
advocate
Use synonyms
 some extents of the given
statement
Use synonyms
.
To begin
Linking Words
 with, there is a wide
range
Use synonyms
 of reasons that
Use synonyms
work
Use synonyms
 is important for
one
Use synonyms
’s
life
Use synonyms
.
First
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,
success
Use synonyms
 in
Use synonyms
work
Use synonyms
 brings about the
sense
Use synonyms
 of
achievement
Use synonyms
accomplishment
Use synonyms
. The plain
truth
Use synonyms
 is that people usually feel more happy and satisfied if they are recognised and
this
Linking Words
 can be gained only when they are working.
In
Linking Words
addition
Use synonyms
,
Use synonyms
work
Use synonyms
 is crucial since it helps people to make ends meet. As
both
Use synonyms
 lucrative and low-paid
Use synonyms
work
Use synonyms
have
Suggestion
has
 to
Use synonyms
workk
activity directed toward making or doing something
work
 to meet basic living requirements or even be affordable to
purchase
Use synonyms
 what they planned to have.
For
Linking Words
instance
Use synonyms
, a recent
research
Use synonyms
 showed that 80
percent
Use synonyms
 of family divorced due to their difficult financial situations, leading to poor
life
Use synonyms
quality
Use synonyms
 and unhappy.
Therefore
Linking Words
,
Use synonyms
work
Use synonyms
 plays an important
role
Use synonyms
 in
one
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’s
life
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.
On the other
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hand
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, there are more desirable goals rather than a successful
life
Use synonyms
 to attain in our
life
Use synonyms
. A vast
majority
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 of people perceive a meaningful
life
Use synonyms
 as having their families and close friends. The plain
truth
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 is that relationships with our family and friends are actually
keep
Suggestion
keeping
 us going and happy even we are
failed
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failing
 or
stucked
caught or fixed
stuck
 in
Use synonyms
job
Suggestion
a job
.
Moreover
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,
health
Use synonyms
 is another worth-mentioning
factor
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. In
fact
Use synonyms
, if people have a good
health
Use synonyms
 or
best immune
Suggestion
the best immune system
system
Use synonyms
, their
Use synonyms
life
the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)
lifetime
time
Use synonyms
 is likely to be filled with human well-being.
By
Linking Words
contrast
Use synonyms
, a successful
person
Use synonyms
 with a
cancer
Use synonyms
 or a fatal
disease
Use synonyms
 might have the negative
outlook
Use synonyms
 in their lives as they have no
time
Use synonyms
. As aforementioned explanations, while it is true that
success
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 makes
life
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 more wonderful, truly important
Use synonyms
thingsin
Suggestion
things in
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life
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life, such
such
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 as
health
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 and relationships are actually vital which
success
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 cannot bring about.
Use synonyms
Work
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 is believed to be
one
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 of the most significant things among other aspects of human
life
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, leading to wrong
perception
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 that
life
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 becomes meaningless if
success
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 could not be obtained. From my own
perspective
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, I just
advocate
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 some extents of the given
statement
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.
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one
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life
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,
success
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 in
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work
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 brings about the
sense
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 of
achievement
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accomplishment
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. The plain
truth
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 is that people usually feel more happy and satisfied if they are recognised and
this
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 can be gained only when they are working.
In
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addition
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,
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work
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 is crucial since it helps people to make ends meet. As
both
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 lucrative and low-paid
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work
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have
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 to
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work
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 to meet basic living requirements or even be affordable to
purchase
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 what they planned to have.
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instance
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, a recent
research
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 showed that 80
percent
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 of family divorced due to their difficult financial situations, leading to poor
life
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quality
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 and unhappy.
Therefore
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,
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activity directed toward making or doing something
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role
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 in
one
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’s
life
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.
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hand
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, there are more desirable goals rather than a successful
life
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 to attain in our
life
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. A vast
majority
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 of people perceive a meaningful
life
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 as having their families and close friends. The plain
truth
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 is that relationships with our family and friends are actually
keep
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keeping
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failed
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 or
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job
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Moreover
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,
health
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 is another worth-mentioning
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. In
fact
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, if people have a good
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 or
best immune
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the best immune system
system
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, their
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life
the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)
lifetime
time
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 is likely to be filled with human well-being.
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, a successful
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thingsin
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things in
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life
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life, such
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health
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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