Due to development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries many small local business are unable to compete.some thought that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree??

Small businesses are unable to compete with supermarkets
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which are
boomed
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booming
in
number
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a number
of countries and according to some
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this
will have dire consequences for local communities. In my opinion
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I agree that local people
suffers
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suffer
as small scale
businesses but
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businesses, but
it is doubtful that it will cause death of local communities. Shopping plazas opened everywhere and they are attracting customers
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buyers lose their interest to consume goods from small scale stores and supermarkets make easier for people to buy
every thing
all things
everything
from a one super store rather than different local shops
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supermarkets
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Supermarkets
are time consuming people get easily whole commodities at one place easily and quickly. People
also
feel good while shopping in well stocked super shopping hubs rather than small shops.
Moreover
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customers no
long
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longer
need to go into noisy and remote areas and roam different shops to meet with their requirements.
Instead they
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Instead, they
drive to shopping plazas often located in the outskirts of their town. Which well facilitated and
also
have tempted
offers
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offers, for
for instance
50%discount over expensive products. Local shops closed because they became unpopular and old structure.
Additionally
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they are unable to accomplish the needs of consumers. It results in empty town which affects the socialization of communities while shopping
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To conclude
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certainly
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it has
negative effect
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a negative effect
on
communities but
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communities, but
they still survive through clubs and other institutions in society.
Also there
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Also, there
are
number
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a number
of shops which are unaffected because they are out
competition
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competing
competed
.
For
example supermarkets
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example, supermarkets
do not offer top quality of indigenous products

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  • To summarize
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic impact
  • local economy
  • employment opportunities
  • social fabric
  • community hubs
  • social cohesion
  • cultural identity
  • cultural diversity
  • homogenization
  • consumer choice
  • environmental impact
  • carbon footprint
  • elaborate supply chains
  • supermarket dominance
  • local businesses closure
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