Due to development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries many small local business are unable to compete.some thought that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree??

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Small businesses are unable to compete with supermarkets

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which are

boomed

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booming

number

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a number

of countries and according to some

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this

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will have dire consequences for local communities. In my opinion

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I agree that local people

suffers

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suffer

as small scale

businesses but

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businesses, but

it is doubtful that it will cause death of local communities. Shopping plazas opened everywhere and they are attracting customers

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buyers lose their interest to consume goods from small scale stores and supermarkets make easier for people to buy

every thing

all things

everything

from a one super store rather than different local shops

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supermarkets

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Supermarkets

are time consuming people get easily whole commodities at one place easily and quickly. People

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feel good while shopping in well stocked super shopping hubs rather than small shops.

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customers no

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longer

need to go into noisy and remote areas and roam different shops to meet with their requirements.

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Instead they

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drive to shopping plazas often located in the outskirts of their town. Which well facilitated and

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have tempted

offers

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offers, for

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50%discount over expensive products. Local shops closed because they became unpopular and old structure.

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they are unable to accomplish the needs of consumers. It results in empty town which affects the socialization of communities while shopping

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To conclude

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certainly

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it has

negative effect

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a negative effect

communities but

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communities, but

they still survive through clubs and other institutions in society.

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Also there

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a number

of shops which are unaffected because they are out

competition

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competing

competed

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example supermarkets

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example, supermarkets

do not offer top quality of indigenous products

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

245 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

economic impact
local economy
employment opportunities
social fabric
community hubs
social cohesion
cultural identity
cultural diversity
homogenization
consumer choice
environmental impact
carbon footprint
elaborate supply chains
supermarket dominance
local businesses closure

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Due to development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries many small local business are unable to compete.some thought that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree??

Include an introduction and conclusion

The most important of science should be to improve people's lives. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?.

Directors of large organisations receive much higher salaries than ordinary workers. Some think it is necessary, while others think it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

You have bought some clothing online and are not satisfied with your purchase. Write a letter to the company that you bought the clothing from. In your email •Give details of your purchase •Describe the problem •Explain why you need a replacement urgently

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people say that to benefit the development of a child, the mother and father should take parenting classes. To what extent you agree or disagree with this statement?