Some people believe money is the best gift for teenagers. While others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Gifts generally are freewill gestures which can either come in cash or kind to people. The believe of some persons is that it is best in cash for teenagers while others disagree. I am of the opinion that before these gifts are offered, some factors surrounding the teenagers should be put into consideration. On

one

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hand

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monetary gifts can be channelled into achieving multiple needs. It is possible that a

teenager

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needs a novel, a table clock and a reading lamp. He or she won't think twice about getting these things if gifted money.

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, when I was in secondary

school

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some five years back

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my mother's friend saw me trekking to

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and gifted me a hundred

naira

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Naira

mere

note to board a cab to and fro

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. But

on the contrary

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, I still trekked to

school

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, bought meat pie and sachet water during break time, trekked back home and used the remaining part to fix my bicycle.

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, the money I was given helped in repairing my bicycle and no longer worry about how to get to

school

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time.

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, material gifts

creates

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create

long lasting memories in the minds of the teenagers. These gifts are either used or kept. Regardless of how long they may seem, each time

one

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comes in touch with these material gifts, there is

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joyful memory that rebounds. When I was seventeen years old, uncle Sam gifted me a

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game. I felt like the whole world was under my feet because my number of friends and respect skyrocketed as I was the only

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that had a

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game

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in our

neighborhood

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neighbourhood

. Despite it being several years down memory lane, I still have the spoilt

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gave in my wardrobe which makes me grin and remember uncle Sam.

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, in my own opinion, some factors surrounding the teenagers should be a determinant as to what gifts he/she should get.

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of the factors is the

background

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of the teenagers. A

teenager

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from a poor

background

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who doesn't have a

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will not value a video game. He/she will prefer money to buy some pressing needs like food items and clothes. I know of a poor

teenager

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who lived with his parents few houses away from

ours who

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ours, who

was given a mobile phone by

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of his friends from a well-to-do

background

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. The

teenager

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only saw

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as a liability and

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sold it to buy a pair of sandal and food items. On a

final note, to

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final note,

some people monetary gifts are the best as it can be channelled into achieving multiple needs for teenagers while others believe material gifts is

best

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better

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reason being that it creates long lasting memories. But I am of the opinion that the teenagers

background

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should determine what gifts he or she should get.

Mon Jan 13 2020

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

469 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

financial responsibility
budget
save
informed spending decisions
personal preferences
practical and efficient
unwanted or inappropriate gifts
impersonal
emotional value
thoughtfulness
personal consideration
wise financial decisions
frivolously
lasting memories and experiences
educational courses
hobby-related equipment
long-lasting positive impact
fostering interests and skills

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Some people believe money is the best gift for teenagers. While others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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