Some people believe money is the best gift for teenagers. While others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Gifts generally are freewill gestures which can either come in cash or kind to people. The believe of some persons is that it is best in cash for teenagers while others disagree. I am of the opinion that before these gifts are offered, some factors surrounding the teenagers should be put into consideration. On

one

hand

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monetary gifts can be channelled into achieving multiple needs. It is possible that a

teenager

needs a novel, a table clock and a reading lamp. He or she won't think twice about getting these things if gifted money.

For example

, when I was in secondary

school

some five years back

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my mother's friend saw me trekking to

school

and gifted me a hundred

naira

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Naira

mere

note to board a cab to and fro

school

. But

on the contrary

, I still trekked to

school

, bought meat pie and sachet water during break time, trekked back home and used the remaining part to fix my bicycle.

However

, the money I was given helped in repairing my bicycle and no longer worry about how to get to

school

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time.

On the other hand

, material gifts

creates

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create

long lasting memories in the minds of the teenagers. These gifts are either used or kept. Regardless of how long they may seem, each time

one

comes in touch with these material gifts, there is

this

joyful memory that rebounds. When I was seventeen years old, uncle Sam gifted me a

game. I felt like the whole world was under my feet because my number of friends and respect skyrocketed as I was the only

one

that had a

game

then

in our

neighborhood

a surrounding or nearby region

neighbourhood

. Despite it being several years down memory lane, I still have the spoilt

gave in my wardrobe which makes me grin and remember uncle Sam.

However

, in my own opinion, some factors surrounding the teenagers should be a determinant as to what gifts he/she should get.

One

of the factors is the

background

of the teenagers. A

teenager

from a poor

background

who doesn't have a

will not value a video game. He/she will prefer money to buy some pressing needs like food items and clothes. I know of a poor

teenager

who lived with his parents few houses away from

ours who

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ours, who

was given a mobile phone by

one

of his friends from a well-to-do

background

. The

teenager

only saw

this

as a liability and

therefore

sold it to buy a pair of sandal and food items. On a

final note, to

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final note,

some people monetary gifts are the best as it can be channelled into achieving multiple needs for teenagers while others believe material gifts is

best

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better

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reason being that it creates long lasting memories. But I am of the opinion that the teenagers

background

should determine what gifts he or she should get.

Mon Jan 13 2020

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Grammar mistakes
 

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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