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Some people believe money is the best gift for teenagers. While others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Gifts generally are freewill gestures which can either come in cash or kind to people. The believe of some persons is that it is best in cash for teenagers while others disagree. I am of the opinion that before these gifts are offered, some factors surrounding the teenagers should be put into consideration. On
one
 hand
,
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,
monetary gifts can be channelled into achieving multiple needs. It is possible that a
teenager
 needs a novel, a table clock and a reading lamp. He or she won't think twice about getting these things if gifted money.
For example
, when I was in secondary
school
 some five years back
,
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,
my mother's friend saw me trekking to
school
 and gifted me a hundred
naira
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Naira
more
mere
 note to board a cab to and fro
school
. But
on the contrary
, I still trekked to
school
, bought meat pie and sachet water during break time, trekked back home and used the remaining part to fix my bicycle.
However
, the money I was given helped in repairing my bicycle and no longer worry about how to get to
school
in
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on
 time.
On the other hand
, material gifts
creates
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create
 long lasting memories in the minds of the teenagers. These gifts are either used or kept. Regardless of how long they may seem, each time
one
 comes in touch with these material gifts, there is
this
 joyful memory that rebounds. When I was seventeen years old, uncle Sam gifted me a
TV
 game. I felt like the whole world was under my feet because my number of friends and respect skyrocketed as I was the only
one
 that had a
TV
 game
then
 in our
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
. Despite it being several years down memory lane, I still have the spoilt
TV
 gave in my wardrobe which makes me grin and remember uncle Sam.
However
, in my own opinion, some factors surrounding the teenagers should be a determinant as to what gifts he/she should get.
One
 of the factors is the
background
 of the teenagers. A
teenager
 from a poor
background
 who doesn't have a
TV
 will not value a video game. He/she will prefer money to buy some pressing needs like food items and clothes. I know of a poor
teenager
 who lived with his parents few houses away from
ours who
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ours, who
 was given a mobile phone by
one
 of his friends from a well-to-do
background
. The
teenager
 only saw
this
 as a liability and
therefore
 sold it to buy a pair of sandal and food items. On a
final note, to
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final note,
 some people monetary gifts are the best as it can be channelled into achieving multiple needs for teenagers while others believe material gifts is
best
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better
,
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,
reason being that it creates long lasting memories. But I am of the opinion that the teenagers
background
 should determine what gifts he or she should get.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial responsibility
  • budget
  • save
  • informed spending decisions
  • personal preferences
  • practical and efficient
  • unwanted or inappropriate gifts
  • impersonal
  • emotional value
  • thoughtfulness
  • personal consideration
  • wise financial decisions
  • frivolously
  • lasting memories and experiences
  • educational courses
  • hobby-related equipment
  • long-lasting positive impact
  • fostering interests and skills
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