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The cost of international travel are decreasing and tourism is growing. What are the advantages and disadvantages of increasing tourism activity in different countries?

#cost #travel #tourism #activity #countries
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Now it has become a trend to travel at different
locations
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locations, hence
hence
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, the expenses of
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 other countries are going down and tourism has increased. So, in
this
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 essay, I will discuss
pros
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Pros
 and cons of the above statement so that a feasible conclusion comes at the end. With globalization, it has become easier to travel from one place to
another
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another, hence
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, mosses are
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 without any obstacles. Tourists play a vital role in the development of the
country
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. These are myriad of the reasons,
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,
expediters
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Expediters
expedites
 admire to explore new places due to
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 they spend huge money to relish
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this
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it, hence this
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, it results in boosting the economy of that particular
country
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,
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, Dubai has
maximum count
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a maximum count
 of visitors so, they have
strong economy
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strong economies
a strong economy
 because people come there and spend money
in
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on
 buying
jewelry
an adornment (as a bracelet or ring or necklace) made of precious metals and set with gems (or imitation gems)
jewellery
, visiting amusement parks and shopping malls.
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 to
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, when a person visits another
country
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 indirectly they are cheering their culture and tradition with each
other
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other, such
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 as Indian prefers to eat spicy
food whereas
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food, whereas
 in Brazil they do not like to have
chili
ground beef and chili peppers or chili powder often with tomatoes and kidney beans
chilli
 in their food.
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, a
country
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 that has more tourists and explorers has more reputation in the world and they have a separate identity.
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, it has been observed that countries with high tourist rate have a high crime rate. Local people take advantage of voyagers and aggravate their visit by stealing and kidnapping them.
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, the language barrier makes the situation more deteriorated,
instead
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 of helping them they misguide them. In spite of
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, in some countries, it has been found that visas are not given to those countries whose people are not well behaved, disciplined and tidy. By concluding
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, no Doubt tourism has increased and many countries are getting benefits from it in monetary
terms but
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terms, but
 it
also
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 gives rise to Crime
also
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.

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