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Sales of popular consumer goods is increasing YouTube power of advertisement for real need of people in the society is increasing give your opinion and example for your answer

#sales #consumer #goods #youtube #power #advertisement #people #society
In
this
 contemporary era coma
advertisement
play
Suggestion
plays
 a dominant role in enlighten
consumer
 about the
product
. It is believed by one school of thought that, hacking in demand of
consumer
 good is going to influence of
advertisement
 whilst,
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 believe that people really need that I strongly opposed is argument and the reason for my inclination are articulated in trail paragraphs. To commence with,
although
advertisement
Suggestion
the advertisement
 is a key of modern business, it into target a
consumer
 to buy the
product
 whether it is necessary or not. To cite an example, technological
product
 like the AI
baseportable
Suggestion
base portable
bluetooth
(computing, trademark) a short range wireless technology for connecting different devices such as computers and mobile phones
Bluetooth
 speaker of
Amazon which
Accept comma addition
Amazon, which
 is useless, it is in a developing period, but Lucy
advertisement
attract
Suggestion
attracts
 the masses towards it and the technophiles buying it.
Moreover
, most of the fast food companies offer
handsome amount
Suggestion
a handsome amount
of of
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
 money to celebrity to do a promotion of their products comma as most of the people blindly follow them, it's definitely boom the sale of
product
 full stop according to
survey
Suggestion
the survey
a survey
 of the Times of India, in India
this
 is of Pepsi increased because it was promoted by the cricket player Virat Kohli all the people know it is hazardous to health. Another element argument to support my inclination is that it is a walk among folk to use a branded
product
 it is because of the impact of a glamorous
advertisement
. To illustrate, the electronic products of people are not only but
also
 in demand among youngsters as it gives status symbols
last
 but not the
least 10
Accept comma addition
least, 10
 rupees main menu plate their
consumer
 by hiding terms and conditions. On the Close scrutiny, I can prove that in
this
 technological era the sales of
product
 not depend on the quality of
product
Suggestion
the product
 but on the
advertisement
 as "saying is believing"
.
Accept space
.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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