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The success of a business or sports team depends more on the leader of that team than on the individual team members. This is because it is the leader who makes sure everyone works together to achieve the team's goals. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In any business or sports
team
, there is a common goal
,
Accept space
,
 a target that the group are hoping to achieve together. With
right skills
Suggestion
the right skills
 and enthusiasm a
leader
 can motivate and help the
team
 members guide to the ultimate goal. The level of success depends on the skills and personality of the
leader
.
Firstly
, it is the
leader
 of the
team
 who is responsible for motivating individuals in the
team
.
For example
, a
leader
 with
right communication skills
Suggestion
the right communication skills
 and confidence can motivate the individuals in the
team
 to do
there
of them or themselves
their
 personal best. A
leader
 can delegate to
tasks
Suggestion
task
 basis the strengths of individual's and
thus
 give chance to everyone to contribute to
team
 success.
Secondly
, if the
leader
 is not confident or doesn't have
right skills
Suggestion
the right skills
then
 individual's lack interest and
persue
carry out or participate in an activity; be involved in
pursue
there
of them or themselves
their
 own agendas.
For instance
, they may take a back seat and do as little as possible, or in
sports
Suggestion
a sports team
sports teams
team
, notice them personally.
This
 behaviour by one member would sabotage the efforts of the group overall. To sum up
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 am confident that a
leader
 with
right
 skills would motivate the
team
 being successful and not being confident leads to disappointment amongst the
team
 members and failure of the group's
utlimate
furthest or highest in degree or order; utmost or extreme
ultimate
 goal.

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