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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of the outweigh the disadvantage?

#experts #children #language #school #outweigh
We are living in the
age
 of globalisation, learning international
language
 can bring benefits for someone.
Group
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A group
 of people
think
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thinks
 that it is
beneficent
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beneficial
 for students to start practicing a overseas tongue at elementary academy
instead
 of junior high
school
. In
this
eassy
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
 will discuss above both
statments
a message that is stated or declared; a communication (oral or written) setting forth particulars or facts etc
statements
 in the following paragraphs. Nowadays learning international assents is easier,
although
 it will be easier if students learn and practice at elementary
school
, which will be beneficial for students, as in early
school
 students does not have
extra academic burden
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an extra academic burden
 on them.
For
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Four
 pupils those years of schooling
are counted
Suggestion
count
 as productive years of their life. Students can learn whatever in productive
age
.
For
instance in
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instance, in
 India, it is found that pupils under the
age
 of 12 years are
bilinguist
(biology) a scientist who studies living organisms
biologist
 and some of them are
trilinguist
.
However
, learning any
language
 at
school
can be learn
Suggestion
can be learned
can be learnt
 with creativity.
Although
 junior high
school
 is totally focused on student academics, where learning a overseas
language
 is quite difficult because of their daily academic studies. Even though
school curriculam
Suggestion
the school curriculum
school curriculum
 provides classes
for
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in
 foreign
language
, almost the classes are just an extracurricular activity for students,
as a
result they
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result, they
 do not take it seriously and focusing on their current academic syllabus.
For
example in
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example, in
 India individuals above the
age
 of 15 are found to be serious towards the
schooling
Suggestion
school
 syllabus, while they took physical extracurricular activities, students are found to be busy in deciding their upcoming carrier,
as a result
 students do not take
language
 classes seriously. In conclusion, overseas
language
 can be
learn
Suggestion
learned
learnt
 at both
schools but
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schools, but
 it will be beneficial if students learn it in elementary
school
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive abilities
  • pronunciation
  • self-conscious
  • cultural awareness
  • global society
  • proficiency levels
  • competitive job market
  • foundational skills
  • qualified teachers
  • recreational activities
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