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Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well-educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Television
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 is an inseparable thing for the new generation
today
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. The advancement in the
television
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 industry has changed the way man lives
today
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 by bringing
him every
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him, every
 event
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 happening around the world and providing all kinds of entertainment to watch from home. For better or worse people are addicted to
television
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 programs and spend a great deal of
time
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 watching it. The impact of
television
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 on children is a matter of worry for many, especially for parents, as children are the most passionate about televisions
today
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. Unlike a generation ago, where children were spending their
time
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 reading books or doing outdoor activities that help them in their personal, intellectual and physical development,
today
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's children are more preferred to sit at home and relax watching their favourite
television
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 channel will definitely have an advert impact on their development.
Television
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 can bring in educational programs for
children but
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children, but
 it cannot replace the
tradition
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traditional
 way of studying from books! Books are subject specific and have a great amount of well-focused information for children to study. Apart from teaching specific subjects, it
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 helps children to learn to read, write and make decisions.
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,
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 programmes to teach the same subject will not bring in these benefits and make the children a lazy learner.
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, children are not keen to watch
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 educational programs. They are more interested in watching sports, movies and cartoons which may not have educational concepts but more of an entertainment
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factor
. Obviously, the more
time
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 children spend on
television
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is the
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is, the
 less
time
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 they get for studying from books and
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 impact the quality of their education.
This
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 would remain as a challenge for
today
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's parents, teachers and society.
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