Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Wild animals are kept in zoos all over
world
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the world
. At present, zoos are a tourist attraction in many countries and need wild animals to attract
vistors
someone who visits
visitors
. I
beleve
accept as true; take to be true
believe
that wild creatures should not be kept in zoos and there should be alternative ways to see them. There are many good reasons for having zoos in our cities. Most importantly, they attract tourists and make money for
city
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the city
cities
. Visitors get
chance
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a chance
the chance
to see wild animals that they would not see unless they travelled far away. Rare species, like Chinese panda, or Indian tiger, or African rhino
for example
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,
are endangered
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is endangered
and if we had no zoos they would die. Zoos care for these
aminals
a living organism characterized by voluntary movement
animals
and give us
chance
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a chance
the chance
to see them.
Therefore
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, we cannot underestimate
teh
definite article
the
educational importance of zoos.
However
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, many people feel that wild animals should be free. They should not be kept in cages and small areas in
zoo
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a zoo
the zoo
zoos
.
This
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is cruel for animal and they often die because they is not in natural habitat. We frequently see
news story
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a news story
news stories
the news story
about rare animals dying in zoos or getting sick because
area
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the area
an area
is not big enough or suitable for wild animals like lions or polar bears.
Also
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, these animals are unhappy and sometimes attack humans. Caging wild animals is unhealthy for the animals and is cruel. Both views put forward valid points,
however
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, I strongly believe that zoos are no place for wild animals. If animals need to be cared for, they should be looked after in
theier
of them or themselves
their
natural habitat in game parks or wildlife reserves.
Goverments
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Governments
should look after the precious wild animals at their country and should close down zoos that profit from them. In conclusion,
although
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people believe that zoos are good places to keep wild animals because they can earn money and educate people, I feel that we do not need zoos anymore. We can look at wild animals on the internet and we can feel happy knowing that they are free.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • captivity
  • natural habitat
  • artificial enclosures
  • genetic diversity
  • animal welfare
  • conservation efforts
  • endangered species
  • biodiversity
  • education platform
  • breeding programs
  • reintroduction
  • psychological suffering
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