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Do you disagree or not that individuals are responsible for their own happiness or it depends on the factors of the person's life?

#individuals #happiness #factors #person #life
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introduces two alternatives
whether
 individuals are responsible for their own
happiness
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 or it depends on the circumstances of life. Both common sense and life experience have told us that anyone can be happy.
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, I would disagree with the opinion that bad factors can affect someone's
happiness
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 and would argue that everyone can make
happiness
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 and gladness whatever the circumstances are. Indisputably, there are many factors which could help make
happiness
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. To illustrate, let us look at the example of big amount of money. Many people say that money
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makes
happiness
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Such
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 as: buying cars, going to restaurants, or travelling.
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, I believe anyone can be happy even with a very tight budget.
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, you can travel to many places and going to restaurants with a very cheap cost.
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,
happiness
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 is not just about money. Having a lovely family could make us very glad.
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, to be satisfied with the things you already have will make you feel much more peaceful and
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 make you happier and very much pleased.
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, there are a lot of people who are rich and never feel happy. In conclusion, I believe that anybody could be happy. It does not matter what your circumstances are. After some measurements are performed and some areas are involved, I agree with the opinion that individuals are responsible for their own
happiness
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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