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Some people believe that giving longer prison sentences is the best way to reduce crime. Others believe that there are better ways to reduce crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is no doubt these days the crimes are playing a major problem in our lives.
However
 the question: Does the
prison
period
 have a positive relationship with the instance of the crimes? Is considered one of the most controversial issues today. In
this
 essay I am going to examine both viewpoints. On one side of the argument there are people who argued that the benefits considerably outweigh the disadvantages. In main reason for believing
this
 is the
prison
 nowadays has different rehabilitation programs which help in to transform the people. Orange is the new black program show,
for example
, it shows different kinds of therapeutic sessions there were using it during the
prison
period
 to change the mindset of the crime person.
Moreover
, It is possible to say that when the crimes people staying a long time in
prison
this
 will contribute a sense of punishment and feeling lonely. A good illustration of
this
 the statistic showed a high percentage of cases treated by sense of punishment not the actual harmed punishment.
On the other hand
, It is
also
 possible to consider it with the opposing case. The other argued that long time might not decrease the crime they believe that because of when they are staying a long time in
prison
, they will loss all the friendship they could have and once again if they did not have those therapy sessions they absolutely will feel the nation against them and they will never change their crimes attitude.
In addition
, the others normal people their eye view of the abnormal people
such
 as crime people
also
 will affect their attitude. We have seen that there are no easy answers for
this
 question. On balance,
however
, I tend to believe that the best way is to have a long
period
 of healing sessions during the
period
 of
prison
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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