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"Prevention is better than cure." Our of a country's health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventive measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The amount of
money
 the government invested in the state's
health
, among that more than 50% of the budget should be transferred to the fitness education and
prevention
 centres, rather than using huge
money
 on treating the patients.
This
 essay agrees with the statement given above in sequence to save
money
 and
also
 human lives.
First
 of all, the usage of
money
 will be less at the starting stage of the disease
instead
 of spending it on the
last
 stage of the fever. Because
money
 is the important thing on the earth, everyone needs
money
 to survive. Some people can afford more on treatment, and some won't. So we should take care of our
health
 from beginning.
For example
, one of my friend's is suffering from kidney problem
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
.
e
Suggestion
E
 some stones have developed in his stomach. As he was more aware of the
prevention
, he himself took care of his
health
 with necessary medications.
Thus
 he solved the issue at an initial stage. He
also
 saved
money
 rather than leaving his
health
 condition to a high level.
On the other hand
, every living thing is very important on the earth and we should look after it every time. By putting more in aid-caring institute's is more worth than spending high on treatments. So that public can become more aware of their
health
, and they start caring about them. In the instance, the USA government in 2003 made a sentence that more
money
 must be sent to
health
 and
prevention
 education courses. From that public in the USA became aware of their life and illness rate was successfully decreased. In conclusion, rather than using higher income on treating the disease the public association should transfer more rupees to the
prevention
 and wellness education centres. In order to save the previous lives and
also
 the wealthiest.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preventive measures
  • health education
  • public awareness
  • proactive approach
  • unsustainable
  • economic productivity
  • healthcare system
  • vaccinations
  • curative measures
  • comprehensive healthcare
  • financial burden
  • incidence
  • preventable diseases
  • eradicating
  • controlling
  • allocated
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