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University students must pay all tuition fees, because it benefits mostly them individually, rather than the society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

#university #students #tuition #fees #society
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Education
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 is a
possession
the particular portion of space occupied by something
position
 which makes a person stand tall and high. It adds to the overall physical personality of the person and makes him stand apart and outshines others who don’t possess it.
Education
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 is an eternal rock which never withers, not even during the wild waves of evil. It is
only
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the only education
education
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 which makes people bow in front of the educated and is one of the moral fabrics of any country which binds the whole society into one nation. It is due to
this
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 high pedestal which the
education
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 occupies that higher
education
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 must be provided by the State, albeit to those subjects of the state who are economically weak. There are,
however
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, two schools of thought. One school of thought is of the view that the cost of higher studies should be borne by the students themselves.
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, in
such
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 a scenario, all those meritorious students who are unable to continue their
education
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 for want of money (read economic resources) would be left with no option but to get themselves tagged as ‘drop outs’ by the society, due to no fault of theirs. ‘No
student
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 should be left deprived of
education
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’ must be one of the objectives (read fundamental duty) of every Nation/State.
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, a
student
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 who thrives for
education
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 must be wholeheartedly supported by the Nation/State. No stone must be left unturned to make available the most precious of the stones,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
.e.
the
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The
education
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, to the
student
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. It is so because
education
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 is something which is dearer than
the fine
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the finest
 opals, more precious than emeralds! There’ve been quite a lot instances in the recent past, and even now, wherein the entire cost of higher studies of a
student
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 is sponsored by the State. The recent
example which
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example, which
 supports
this
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 is the educational
sponsorship which
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sponsorship, which
 was provided by the state government of ABC (a country) to the son of a widower who earns her livelihood by cleaning utensils at a roadside restaurant. It can
thus
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 be candidly concluded that
education
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 does elevate the horizon and encourages the mankind to labour at present for accruing enjoyment at a later stage in life.
Consequently
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, the state must take responsibility, to a certain extent and for a certain set of individuals based on economic criteria to provide them with free higher
education
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 opportunities.
This
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, in return, would only help the State/Nation to become independent and economically stable.
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