In the past people wore their traditional clothes and followed their culture. These days most people wear similar clothes and therefore look very similar to one another. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Today, we do not belong to a big planet Earth; we belong to a small global village. In
this
shrunken
world
, the cultures have
also
come closer and
as a
result people
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result, people
all over the
world
are dressing up in similar clothes and looking similar.
This
is largely a positive development. On the positive side, people have become more tolerant of each other and are accepting each other in a much better way. They have a feeling that they are all connected even though there are different religions and ways of life.
For example
, when the tsunami disaster occurred, the whole
world
felt the devastation. People from all over the
world
offered their support and sent money to help victims.
Instead
of saying that different parts of the
world
should deal with their own problems, everyone made other
countries
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countries'
problems their own.
This
shared belief of safety and happiness brought people together for comfort and relief. Every
culture
can agree on
such
beliefs. What is more, the idea that the
world
is shrinking its’ differences and uniting, makes us stronger and more capable to accomplish anything. Another positive aspect of
this
culture
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cultural
exchange is that all over the
world people
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world, people
are accepting the good points of each other’s
culture
and
this
also
makes them more aware of the good points of their own
culture
.
For example
, the western clothing, jeans and T-shirts, is very comfortable and easy to manage.
Therefore
, people all over the
world
have adopted it. In the same way, we can see the inclination of many foreigners towards our cultural
values
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Values
and living style. Our holy books, ‘Geeta’ and ‘Ramayana’ have gone global. Yoga and meditation have gained worldwide popularity. Our Indian classical dances are being taught in western countries and
such
classes are not monopolized by the Indian students; they have a diversity of students from all over the
world
. On the negative side, some people feel that it is leading to a loss of global diversity and people are forgetting their own cultural and traditional values.
This
seems true on the face value, but I still feel that there are some deep rooted cultural differences which can never be forgotten. Wearing similar clothes and accepting other people’s cultures can never make anyone completely aloof from one’s own
culture
. To put it in a nutshell, I pen
down saying
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down, saying
that the worldwide similarity among people is largely a positive trend.
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