It is thought by some that its better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

People are always arguing about what is more beneficial, to live in an urban town or in rural areas. Personally, I think that
city
residents are able to obtain more advantages
such
as
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a better
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education
rang
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and
higher
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level of medical help.
However
, in the given essay I will discuss both views.
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the
one
hand, I guess that
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big
city
life can give better opportunities for its inhabitants,
due to
the
big
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variety of options for education and more possibilities for employment.
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, people
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not just
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an available job, they might choose the best
one
from the many other options.
For example
, Russian scientist Mikhail Lomonosov,
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was born in a rural area where even school education
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unavailable. Mikhail reached the destination of 1000km by foot from his village to Moscow and
finally
became
one
of the most talented Russian professors.
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, in
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countryside
an
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urgent medical care is not always available
or
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quality is not good enough either, because of the lack of professionals. In
this
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the big distance to the
city
can
ends
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up with a detrimental outcome.
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, the latest news reported about
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car accident outside of the
city
, where
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has
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been waiting for
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medical care for 3 hours. Fortunately, that situation had
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happy
end
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and there were no victims, but
this
is a situation
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.
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To summarize, I have discussed
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both options, but I
convinced
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that
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life in a
city
is much better than in a small town.

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