In some countries people who visit galleries are reducing. What are the reasons?How can this problem be solved

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inclination of visiting galleries has a declining trend in some nations. There are some possible reasons and effective solutions related to

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phenomenon. The

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reason why individuals have less tendency in visiting galleries could be busy lifestyle. There is little spare time

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in which they prefer passively engaging in their mobile phones or watching TV

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of social participation like visiting public places

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have been almost no alternation in the way galleries exhibit the

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decades

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in spite of all advances in technology. Considering the fact that people nowadays have great passion to being updated and dislike monotonous atmosphere. There are some achievable solutions to

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problem. Authorities in charge of education

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potentially effective impacts by considering extra curricular activities in related to

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galleries. These activities will not only develop a passion for

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but

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help children to establish better cultural insight

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Advocating enough fund could benefit galleries to provide additional items and deploy modern equipments like VR technology in order to simulate the real atmosphere of

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works. To conclude

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people in some countries show less tendency to visit

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galleries, some governmental steps might predictably

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

205 words

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In some countries people who visit galleries are reducing. What are the reasons?How can this problem be solved

Include an introduction and conclusion

In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved?

Some people who have been successful in society don’t attribute their success to the theoretical knowledge they learned from their university. Do you agree that theoretical knowledge is not as valuable as expected?