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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.

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Nowadays over population lead to numerous
problems specially
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problems, especially
problems especially
 in urban areas. Most of the
third
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 world countries suffer from over populations because of lack of government regulations and proper planning. In knowledge I can see two serious problems that affect the
environment
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 and to the human body.
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First problem
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The first problem
 I believe is
environment
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pollution
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. In simple terms when the country develops too many companies and investors start their businesses or expand their businesses and they usually look
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 an urban area like towns. When a town
get
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gets
 over populated, the
next
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 thing is increasing the area and often leads to deforestation.
Meanwhile urban
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Meanwhile, urban
 areas getting over populated
amount
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 of
pollution
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 raises. Lack of
waste
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 management is the most critical issue.
Increased
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The increased amount
amount
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 of people and buildings equally release garbage and toxic materials to the
environment
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. Another issue
that is
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link
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linked
 to the overpopulation is
release
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the release
 of carbon monoxide
to
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into
of
 the air from the vehicles and it harms the atmosphere.
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 the most critical outcome will happen because of over population is the
environment
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 get hazardous to the people.
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 will be a result of
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environment
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environmental
pollution
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. As an example, improper
waste
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 disposal often makes diseases like dengue or
diarrhea
frequent and watery bowel movements; can be a symptom of infection or food poisoning or colitis or a gastrointestinal tumor
diarrhoea
. Dengue virus transferred from mosquitoes and urban areas are full of them. As I discussed in
first
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 problem increased
amount
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 of carbon monoxide not only harms the atmosphere but
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 to the human. Inhaling Increased
amount
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 of carbon monoxide
tend
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tends
 to cause serious
raspatory
pertaining to respiration
respiratory
 problems and sometimes lead to lung cancer. But I suggest as the country develops governments have to issue regulations and increase their urban development strategies. If governments can increase the efficiency of decision making while improving the structure of the law, I strongly believe we can tackle these problems. As an example, if government
make
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makes
 the laws against improper
waste
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 disposal and the same time increase the efficiency of
waste
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 management could result in decrease of
environment
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pollution
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 and reduce of diseases.
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 the government laws can make
huge impact
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a huge impact
 on the mentioned issues, as a responsible person we have to be more careful about the
environment
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • strain on infrastructure
  • public services
  • overcrowded
  • inadequate healthcare services
  • pressure on educational institutions
  • environmental impact
  • increased pollution
  • waste management
  • destruction of green spaces
  • natural habitats
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