Some people think young people should go to university to further their education while others think they should been encouraged to work as car mechanics or builders etc. to serve society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many are of the opinion that

young generation

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the young generation

should go to

university

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to continue their higher

education

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; while others,

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however claim

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however, claim

that they should

been

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inspired to work as car mechanics, builders or vocational workers. It seems to me that both educational and technical training is important for our youngsters.

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with, there is no doubt that

education

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is the part and parcel of our life.

Education

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is one of the

medium

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mediums

which helps us to play a vital role in

these

denotes a person or thing

this

global village. Parents should go their juveniles into

university

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after completing their college life.

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today's parents are very

concious

intentionally conceived

conscious

about their

children

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children's

child's

education

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. To illustrate

this

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, a study

have shown

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has shown

that parents want to send their children abroad to pursue their

university

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education

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Its

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It's

not only makes their children

educated but

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educated, but

also

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build up their general

knowlenge

the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning

knowledge

to keep pace with

this

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competitive world. As a consequence, they might be able to work for their

country

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country's

welfare.

In contrast

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university

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learning should not be our only goal. Because its only gives us knowledge and

broden

make broader

broaden

broadens

our outlook. People should active some vocational

work namely

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work, namely

mechanics

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electricians

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builders and so on. A recent study conducted by the

University

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Torento

the provincial capital and largest city in Ontario (and the largest city in Canada)

Toronto

showed that, 70% of Chinese and 78% of Japanese people were taking part in vocational works in 2019. The

vocatioanl

of or relating to a vocation or occupation; especially providing or undergoing training in special skills

vocational

vacation

workers

plays

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play

a significant role

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their country development. To sum

up,

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up this essay,

up, this essay

up, this issue

this

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eassy based on the reflections seen above certainly agree with the both views. Indeed, both

university

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study and some certain vocational works

are significantly play

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are significantly playing

have significantly played

a great role

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the development of the country.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

268 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

higher education
vocational training
skillset
employment landscape
economic contributions
hands-on experience
critical thinking skills
practical knowledge
tuition fees
trade professions
essential workforce
academic qualifications

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