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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location.
#diagrams #show #design #wave-energy #machine #location
The given diagram illustrates the design and location of
wave
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the wave
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energy
machine
. It is clearly seen that the
wave
energy
machine
 is cemented in water. The design of
wave
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the wave
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energy
machine
 is like there are many spaces and gaps
are
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apply
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provided for the
air flow
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airflow
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. There is one gap at bottom of
machine
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the machine
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at
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on
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left
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the left
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 side for water flow . We can clearly see that there are two main components of the
wave
energy
machine
 and they are
electric
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the electric
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genrator
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generator
 and turbine. The electric turbine is
coupled with
 the turbine. And the
machine
 is having two chambers as shown in
diagram
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the diagram
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. The
wave
energy
machine
 can be used for two locations. One is for large waves and the other is for small waves. If
machine
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the machine
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 is installed at
large
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the large
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wave
 side
then
 it will provide higher output and if the
machine
 is installed at
small
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the small
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wave
 side
then
 it will provide lower output. But
demerit
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the demerit
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 of the large
wave
 is it will have
large
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a large
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installations
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installation
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 cost. And the advantage of
small
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the small
a small
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wave
 is it will have low installation
cost
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costs
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words wave, energy, machine with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 11 times.
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