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Scientists agree that many people eat too much junk food and it is damaging their health. Some people think that this problem can be solved by educating people, while others believe that education will not work. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Recently, there have been constant shifting views about whether educating people about how eating too much
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 will damage their
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 is a way of solving the problem whereas others believe that it will not work. I believe that it is an effective way to solve the issue, I will discuss both views. People who think that educating people about the damages that eating too much
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food
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 does to your
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 might raise awareness.
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, I had an obese friend who ate a lot of
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 when a group of scientists came to his school and did a presentation about how eating too much
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food
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 might affect his
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 and after the presentation, he stopped eating
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. And they might think that when we educate people about the damages that
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 does to a person’s
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 might s
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shorten
the amount of
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 outlets.
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, when the Saudi
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 department made an advertisement about how
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 affected a student’s
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 a lot of universities closed down their
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 outlets. Others who disagree with
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 view might think that when a person gets educated about the damages that
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 does to a person’s body might ignore it and think that he does not eat
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 as much as the educator says.
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, there is a medical article that concluded that when an obese person gets educated about the damages that
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 does to a person’s
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 there is a 39 percent chance that the person will deny that eats that much
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. In conclusion, I believe the advantages of educating people about the damages that eating too much
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 outweigh the disadvantages.
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