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Some students take one year off between finishing school and going to university. Do you think advantages outweigh the disadvantages.?

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It is true that some pupils take one year gap between secondary level education and University study. While,
this
 trend has some
demerits but
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demerits, but
 I personally believe that its advantages are far superior than its disadvantages. The
first
 and foremost advantage is that helps to reduce the burden of their parents. If the students utilise
this
 time period for earning money by
doing some work
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is some work, then they collecting
is some work then they collecting
then
 they collect funds for their University fees which is expensive in these days. Eventually,
learner
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the learner
learners
a learner
 can able to reduce the stress of University fees from their parents.
another
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Another
 worth mentioning advantage is that pupils get a chance to enhance their knowledge related to other culture and background by travelling to different places.
As a result
, they can valuable experience while travelling which makes their mind set very broaden.
In addition
, it is a time when people will explore their interest in different field as well as able to identify their actual measures so they will make their future bright by choosing the right choice and set the goal.
it
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It
 happens only when they find their interesting field.
Moreover
, when they do some work in
this
 time period they get work experience which will be added into the resume and it is considered as more beneficial at workstation as well University when they have been selected why higher authorities. On Another side,
this
 trend has some demerits which can not be Irrefutable.
firstly
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Firstly
, learners will lose their interest by taking a break from study.
because
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Because
 they find it very difficult to establish
connection
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a connection
 with their study as well they are
divided
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dividing
 their interest for making money. To conclude,
although
this
 trend has some
disadvantages but
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disadvantages, but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 still opine that
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 benefits are more prominent than it's
drawback
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drawbacks
a drawback
.

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