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Do you agree or disagree?: "Science is better than Religion".

#science #religion
Every person who is alive would ask certain question like "who created me" or "what happens when I die''.All of these questions are consolidated by one answer:
religion
. As a believer, I significantly agree that my
religion
,
islam
the civilization of Muslims collectively which is governed by the Muslim religion
Islam
, is the best one.
Furthermore
, there is a verse in the holy book, Qur'an, says that "we made everything from water alive".After that, scientist proved that all
livng
the experience of being alive; the course of human events and activities
living
 things
,
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,
 including humans, have a cytoplasm: a cell that contain fluid.
Consequently
, Islam's affirmation is right. Recently
,
Accept space
,
diversity of Muslims started doing videos about reciting
qur'an
Suggestion
Qur'an
 on the social media to see their reaction. Surprisingly, when non-
muslims
of or relating to or supporting Islamism
Muslims
 heard it in their tears started to come out."It is really calming" said by a random person.
Conversely
, science is not soothing.Especially, when it comes to a doctor to give extreme concentration to resolve an issue.
First
 and foremost, science requires varieties of sacrifices in order to assume a theory.Commencing from biology, experiments have to be done on an animal to find a medicine for a disease.That may lead,
as a result
, to the death of the victim because it jeopardizes its survival chances. Whereas in
this
religion
, there is a specific cure for any illness.In the thirteenth century
,
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,
an eminent prophet, said that there is a cure for any disease.Nowadays, medications are available. To come to my notion, I would say that my
religion
's fact proceed science more than a thousand years.It may be an ancient one, but I will not deny that it is accurate.
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