Some people say music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.

Generally, every person loves
listen
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to listen
listening
to
music
. People listen to
music
across the world. Despite various cultures and ages
,
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,
they
are unite
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are uniting
are united
have united
and grow up together with it. I completely accede
this
view. On the one hand, people listen different genres of
music
that it depends on their wish and their cultural background. For insurance, a range of Asian nation
listen
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listens
to English
songs
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songs, however
however
English is not their culture.
Moreover
,
music
is broaden
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has broadened
broadens
ou
of or belonging to us
our
horizon to welcome various cultures all over the world. In our country people adore
music
consequence we
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consequence, we
have international
music
festival "Sharq
taronalari
" every four
year
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years
in Samarkand. Many citizens which come all around the world to access
culture
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the culture
of
nation
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the nation
a nation
and understand deeply pertaining their culture. Another beneficial side of
this
issue is that people
listens any
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listens to any
kind of
music
that they do not understand it. As a
consequence it
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consequence, it
is the best way to bring people of different cultures and ages together.
In addition
,
music
is our life that
music
helps us to enjoy ourselves and spend our time more amazingly. To draw the conclusion, it makes some people
happy that
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happy, that
listen to
music
is the best way that bind people together.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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