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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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It is considered by some that teaching social rules for children in
school
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 to have a more beneficial effect to make an obligate person in
society
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, while there are others who think that parents can teach social criteria to children making better members of
society
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. In my opinion, I believe that
school
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 as an effective
subsocial
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 section of
society
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 can persuade children to become good members of
society
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. On the one hand, many think that learning social rules in the home
by
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of
with
 children through the parent’s supervision could make a better
society
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 member.
In other words
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, children from early edge start to learn environmental
laws spontaneously
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laws, spontaneously
 and familiarization with basic principles leads to children have a deep understanding of social values.
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, parents individually have been
got
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getting
 acquainted with a child in terms of personality and,
therefore
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,
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
 of them could be more impressed children to internalize
worthful
causing hurt
hurtful
 things.
On the other hand
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, teaching valuable social rules by the
school
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 in order to make a good member of
society
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 has an appropriate result, according to some.
School
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 as a part of
society
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 with similar aspect from
point
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the point
a point
 of a management system that children from all walks of life come there to pursue their education goals need to behave according to some criteria in
same the
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the same society
society
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.
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, determine some principals
besides
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 teaching corresponded law in
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 circumstance could be considered as a great commence to use of practical social rules in a similar
society
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.
For example
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, when children learn to set their time in keeping with
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 disciplines, practically they learn how they should carry out their obligations in
society
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.
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, in my opinion, I believe that teaching social rules that one may make enough compatibility of child
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 in
society
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 have
sufficient impression
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a sufficient impression
 on child preparing them to get better homogeneity as a member of
society
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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