Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work in different organization. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Some believe that it is better to be employed in different workplaces during their life. But others think that should
work
one
places
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place
. I find the latter more convincing. On the
one
hand there
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hand, there
are several reasons why it can be argued that that people should
work
for
one
organiza-tion
a group of people who work together
organization
organisation
.
Firstly
, working in
one
place
is the best way of making a good career and having a high salary.
For
example if
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example, if
one
works in the same job for several years the employer most definitely promotes the person.
Secondly
, to be in
one
place
leads
to know
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to knowing
depth their co-workers in that
place
. If that employer knows his colleagues well it helps to manage them and to know in what field they are good at.
On the other hand
the opponents of
these
denotes a person or thing
this
view claim that humans should
work
in
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with
several companies in their working life as it leads to range of
work
and
place
.
For
instance if
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instance, if
people
work
in different workplaces they will not be fed up with their job as people working in
one
organization.
Also it
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Also, it
helps to
work
on oneself to keep up with the workers in other companies. I think working in different kind of companies makes people experienced. In conclusion, even through is good to
working
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work
in
one
place
and having a career during their life I think it is better to
work
in different organizations.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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