In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food or use animal products, for instance, clothing and medicines. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the technology creates a different kind of products, including a variation of the ones that are produced by the animals. I think
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important to replace the products that promoted animal cruelty with the new developments.
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, there are others that it could be necessary to obtain directly from animals for health reasons. Historically, the humanity had been using plenty of animal products that help the development of the society and the technology including agriculture, transportation and communication. Despite, there are some products or activities that provoked animal cruelty,
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, make up testing in monkeys, rabbits and pigs or use horses like a work force in urban areas.
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kind of acts should not be tolerated based on the protection of the environment and the nature.
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, a plenty variety of animal products like eggs, wool or milk, that are produced without animal suffering, had been reproduced in laboratories, but these synthetic products do not have the same qualities, and could develop health issues
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as gastric pathologies, skin problems, cancer and
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illness.
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example, supports the view that in specific
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the technology advance had not reached the mother nature. In conclusion, I agree to replace the products that affect the animal integrity, but for the substitute products that could affect the
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peoples'
people's
health it is preferred to maintain the natural resource. If the society could solve the enigma of the synthetic products provoked illness, it would be a necessary act to let the animals be free.
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