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International marketing is sometimes seen as invasive and an intrusion into the country in question. Others argue that it is a necessary and economical form of education in addition to spreading ideas, language and culture. Discuss both views and then give your opinion

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topic, but
 here is the opinion of a
latin-american
of or relating to the countries of Latin America or their people
Latin-American
 woman. The global market expansion is
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 an
overwarming
so strong as to be irresistible
overwhelming
 concept that feels more like
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 physics than a common day life.
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, it is around us all the time-and I am not talking about Matrix-
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, if you have thirsty maybe you buy a Coca Cola and drink it, and with that action you are contributing
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 the international marketing because Coca Cola is a United States company that have a local distribution. So many people think that international marketing is responsible of the
world
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 biggest breach between rich and poor, because the market only helps the biggest investors and they do not distribute the gains.
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, people think that international market
give
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gives
 us the opportunity to expand our
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innovative
 ideas with the
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, to have different concepts of business and
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 able to reach every corner of
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 planet. In my opinion, the concept of frontiers had never been created. We live in one
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 and due to my neighbour problem is my problem too.
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 the environment if there is a pollution in Amazonas river in Ecuador that would be a contamination in Colombia, Brazil and Atlantic Ocean, it is a global problem.
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 why I am in favour of the international marketing, because it brings us one step forward to
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the state or fact of existing
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 able to understand that we live in the same
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