The high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising but not the real need of society where such products are sold. Do you agree or disagree?
In
this
era, advertising plays a great role in various business sectors, primarily in selling different items. However
, by analysing the most sold goods, can be understood that advertisements
do not really meet the actual demands of society. This
essay can only partly agree with this
idea, due to
different aspects of this
trend, such
as psychological affection, the popularity of unhealthy goods and the real needs of individuals.
To start, psychology has a huge impact on our lives, particularly, on our thoughts, ideas and choices. It is very easy to convince a person that something which he or she does not really need is necessary. This
is how advertisements
work, experts show only the pros, but never the cons. Moreover
, when the popular appears in these videos, for example
, it makes the item gain popularity in a short period of time. For instance
, while
participating in Super Bowl 2023, Rihanna was seen using one of her products by Fenty Beauty while
transitioning between songs for 3-4 seconds, as a result
, the sales for this
blush increased by 67.21%.
Second,
people love not only healthy things but also
unhealthy ones. Advertisers are not really interested in how their products will affect buyers' health, so they advertise everything because many people still prefer to buy this
item. For instance
, this
can be said about fast food. In other words
, KFC has a massive amount of branches all over the world, particularly KFC Turkey branches spent more than 880.000 dollars per month on advertisements
.
On the other hand
, the actual needs of individuals may differ. Obviously, we all have different preferences on which our choices depend. Therefore
, if a person is not interested in any item, he or she will not buy it. Furthermore
, algorithms of advertising function based on this
conception. As follows: if someone needs to find language courses, that person will not choose a driving course instead
. Many find advertisements
really helpful, particularly, this
can be understood by recent interviews on a local channel, namely Leverkusen TV, which indicates that 88.2% of interviewers are satisfied with advertisements
and find them helpful.
To conclude
, advertisements
may have a different impact on society and they partly demonstrate the basic needs of society, while
having both advantages and disadvantages, such
as psychological affection, unhealthy choices and different needs of individuals.Submitted by i.nureddinn on
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complete response
The essay could benefit from a more definitive stance in the introduction. While indicating a partial agreement, the argument would be clearer with a stronger position statement.
clear comprehensive ideas
There are some minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasings that could be improved for better clarity and flow. For example, 'psychological affection' should be 'psychological influence' and 'the popular appears in these videos' could be rephrased for clarity.
logical structure
Improving transitions between paragraphs can enhance the flow and overall coherence of the essay. For instance, the shift from the first to the second paragraph could be smoother with a connecting sentence to link the ideas.
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The use of specific examples, such as Rihanna's promotion of Fenty Beauty and the advertising expenses of KFC branches in Turkey, effectively supports the main points discussed.
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