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Home schooling belongs to the past and is unacceptable in the modern society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ? Use your own knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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In the past,
home
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 schooling was quite a remarkable idea and it seemed like the most natural way of teaching, but in present times it has come under scrutiny. It is agreed that
Home
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 schooling is unacceptable in the modern age. By
analyzing
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
 both the incapability of parents to teach contemporary education to their
child
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children
 as well as no scientific approach using in
learning process
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the learning process
 at
home
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. Every parent may not capable of teaching his or her child at
home
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.
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 Even those mums and dads succeeded
at
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in
 school
,
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,
could forget materials with the passage of time.
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, it is commonly understood that non professional teachers have break of study and practice.
Unfortunately they
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Unfortunately, they
 may not enough
good
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better
 at all subjects than before to teach
novice
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the novice
novices
a novice
.
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Thus
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Thus, this
this
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 makes it clear why
home
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 schooling cannot be supported in
21st century
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the 21st century
.
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.
 At
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home
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Home
 Parents, mentors and others
;
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;
moreover
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, probably use own
method
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 in teaching apprentices
.
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.
Such
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method
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 may not match with any scientific
method
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that is
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 highly required for
job market
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the job market
 or running businesses where child have to perform ultimately in
future
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the future
.
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.
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, adolescence need modern approaches to be taught effectively.
This
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effectiveness
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effect
 cannot be provided with offspring at own places.
That is
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 why the experience of professional teachers
are demanded
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is demanded
 in today's world
.
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 In summary, parents' hindrance to their children's learning process and non effective
method
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 operate to retard a
student
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student's
 ability to learn new information
.
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.
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Thus it
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Thus, it
 is clear why the
idea of having
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idea of having a home
home
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 schooling cannot be supported. It is very detrimental
for
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to
student's future
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the student's future
a student's future
 who will lead our world in
new and prosperous direction
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a new and prosperous direction
the new and prosperous direction
.

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