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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Health
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 is very important for people of every
country
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. In today’s world each person is concerned about the
health
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 of his/her loved ones. These days
health
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 related services are getting very expensive and every person cannot afford it. I agree with the above statement that every
country
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 should provide free
health
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 services to all citizens. At the outset, many people die because they do not have money to spend on their
health
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 as they are facing financial crisis or they do not have any income source.
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, according to the report published by the USA doctors
last
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 year, 5,290 people could not afford
health
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 services
as a result
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 they died.
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, people of every
country
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 pay taxes from their income to the
government
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 and
thus
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 they expect from the
government
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. As
health
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 is a very important for every citizen,
government
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 should provide a free
health
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 service up to a limit of certain amount.
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, the
government
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 should provide free
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 services
such
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 as delivery of a child, general
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 care, free checkups, vaccinations and so on for the citizens, whereas there should be restrictions on expensive medical treatments
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 as cancer; heart attacks and so on. In a nutshell, free
health
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 services should be given to the citizens of every
country
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 by their
government
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 as many people cannot afford the medical services and it is
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government
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 who needs to look after that every citizen have the access to the
health
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 services.

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