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Some people feel that children should be educated in single sex schools; others argue that mixed schools are better. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Education is the need of the hour,
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 the environment where the child is brought up
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 plays an important role in education and learning. In the recent times, many feel that children should be educated in co-ed schools,
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, there are some who argue that single
sex
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 schools are better. In my perspective, co-ed schools
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provide
 by far more learning experience than single
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 schools.
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 essay
gingerely
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 delineates both the viewpoints in the following paragraphs. There are people who are of the opinion that studying in a single
sex
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 school outweighs the advantages of studying in mixed schools. They argue that studying amongst the same
gender
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 might make the student feel safer as he/she would not be accustomed to the behaviour and varied physical attributes of the opposite
sex
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. The student might
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 face less pressure in terms of fitting in with the opposite
gender
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. Puberty is considered to be the most tiring time of
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's life
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 it is at
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 time when
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 experience changes in terms of mental, emotional and physical appearances. At
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 time, children might face varied emotions which might not be understood by them,
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 in turn could lead to confusion, embarrassment and frustration. Single
gender
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 schools might make the transition to adolescence a tad more comfortable
,
Accept space
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as everybody would be going through similar body changes. For
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. A study of public schools in the villages in India has shown that girls in the age group of 11-16 years were more likely to quit school as they were
embarassed
deeply or markedly affected or influenced
impressed
 with the physical changes their body goes through during puberty.
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, mixed
gender
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 schooling will prepare
one
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 for today's competitive world. A child who has had exposure to the opposite
gender
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 would not hesitate talking to them. It would
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 make it easier for them to stand for themselves and put forth their opinion. Co-ed
schooling
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schools
school
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 teaches the child to be more considerate and understanding
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of
 the opposite
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. They
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 learn to be respectful and accommodating. To exemplify my point
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, a research conducted in a small city called Pune, situated in India, shows that children who studied in co-ed schools were far more likely to voice their opinion in a crowd. To recapitulate, attending a co-ed or single
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 school equally have their positive and negative impacts.
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,
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 may not outweigh the advantages of the other.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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