You eat in your college cafeteria everyday lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements.

#college #cafeteria #lunchtime #improvements

Dear Ms Margaret, I have decided to write

this

letter to inform you of a few personal ideas that I have about our

college

cafeteria. As a regular customer, I would like to take the opportunity to express my gratitude to the people behind

this

cafe and I

also

believe some improvements would make it even more attractive. I am hoping that you would publish my ideas in your

college

magazine. I personally feel that our

college

cafeteria has a great environment and offers delicious and healthy

food

. I appreciate the hard work of all the chefs and management for their attempt to serve meals to the students who are sometimes fussy and hard to please. The management

is in

Accept comma addition

is, in

fact, doing an excellent job.

However

, many students, including

reflexive form of "me"

myself

, feel that the

food

served in the cafeteria is expensive. Our canteen charges $15-$20 for lunch and

this

is considerably higher. A few other

college

canteens in our city

charges

Suggestion

charge

less than that. It appears that students will soon make an inevitable choice to eat outside the campus due to the high price. As an individual who would love to continue eating fantastic

food

at our central eatery, I would like to suggest you publish an article about

this

issue. I hope

this

will help the canteen management become aware of how we think about their

food

price. If you have any

further

questions about

this

, please let me know. Yours faithfully, Kay Lim

Fri Jan 17 2020

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You eat in your college cafeteria everyday lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements.

Fully explain your ideas

should student study harder than lesson. Do you agree or diagree?

Many people nowadays spend a large part of their free time using a smartphone. What do you think are the reason for this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Poor nutrition and obesity is a problem in many developed countries and some people believe that a tax on fast food would reduce the problem. Do you agree?

Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this. Discuss both views and give your opinion.