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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such a situation. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #situation #job #shortage #money
It is a fact that not everyone is blessed with a great
life
, every person faces great, as well as awful situations. Some people choose to move on with their
life
, no matter what they face.
Also
, there are people who will try to improve their situations by giving effort in order to improve their grave conditions. In my opinion,
however
, people should challenge themselves to gain a higher position. It is evident, that most of the people face pathetic situations in their
life
.
For
example there
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example, there
 is a universal issue of unemployment in almost every country. Particularly in India, people often get frustrated because of being jobless or getting paid with low wages.
This
, is mainly due to overpopulation. People being dissatisfied with their own lifestyle
often leads
Suggestion
often lead
 to paramount stress, which in turn, leads them to be thrown into depression. There has been recent news about the increase in suicide rates in India. People
underperform
 in their jobs because of the stress. In order to not to be a victim, it is essential to learn to cope up with
such
 kind of situations.
However
, even in poor conditions, there are always ways to deal with every problem we face in our daily
life
. Most of the mentally strong people will strive to work hard for better earning. To state a good example, Japan is a country which faced horrendous natural disasters
such
 as earthquakes and floods, it was
also
 hit by atomic bombs during
second world War
Suggestion
the second World War
the second world War
.
Although
, Japan faced
life
 and death circumstances, they withstood all of them and worked hard to build their economy. Today, they are one of the world's most respected nations. There will be an improvement in
life
, if a person is willing to work hard and get into a favourable position
event hough
Suggestion
even though
 they are thrown into deep troubles. Even though, there are
troubles it
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troubles, it
 is always advisable to achieve a better
life
. Contemplating the above scenarios, it is most important that every person, in order to develop their living conditions, needs evade comfort zone and make great efforts for a better lifestyle.
This
 will not only give a sense of contentment, but
also
 better
life
 for a future family.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Contentment
  • Resilience
  • Personal growth
  • Endurance
  • Initiative
  • Advancement
  • Catalyst
  • Financial stability
  • Status quo
  • Innovation
  • Missed opportunities
  • Life satisfaction
  • Adverse situations
  • Taking control
  • Risk assessment
  • Change management
  • Self-improvement
  • Motivation
  • Stagnation
  • Proactivity
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