The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.
 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.
 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the manufacturing process of
the
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brick from
the
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clay
, used for the construction industry.
The
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clay
is the primary component for the manufacturing of
bricks
. A digger is used to carry the
clay
from the earth and put
this
clay
over the metal grid, which is used to convert
this
clay
into fine form. After the metal grid, the roller conveyor transfers the finer form of the
clay
toward the
next
stage.
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the
next
step, the water is mixed with the sand to make a thick paste which is filled n the mould. A wire cutter is employed to cut the rectangular bars into
bricks
.
Furthermore
,
bricks
are placed in a drying oven for 24 to 48 hours. After that, the dried
bricks
are put into the kiln at a moderate temperature of 200 to 980 0C and in the
next
chamber of the kiln, the temperature is
further
increased up to a range of 870 to 1300 0C. Taking out of the kiln, the
bricks
are transferred to the cooling chamber for two to three days.
Then
comes the packing of the
bricks
followed by the delivery to the construction industry.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words clay, bricks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacture
  • brick(s)
  • building industry
  • digging
  • extraction
  • raw material
  • clay
  • mixing
  • moulding
  • wire cutting
  • drying oven
  • firing
  • kiln
  • high temperatures
  • hardening
  • cooling
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • traditional
  • modern
  • environmental considerations
  • sustainability practices
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