Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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safety has become a great concern for people with the rise of accidents and fatality those accidents cause every day. People have a varying opinion on how to make roads safe and I believe strict laws should be there to punish the driving offenders but a combination of other methods would bring better results. On the one hand, people seem to abide by a law or rule when they know that violation would bring severe retribution.
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, in some Asian countries pedestrians used to cross the roads and when a more rigid penalty has been imposed, those very people started using the underpass. From
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perspective, strict penalty and fine can certainly improve the
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safety as people would be more cautious and afraid of the consequence of the violation of the
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laws. As an outcome, it is a fact that, the sterner the punishment, the greater chances that people would follow the rules.
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, there are already severe punishments for driving offenders, including ceasing the driving license, monetary fines and imprisonments. Despite
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, the number of
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accidents is increasing every year.
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is why I believe that only punishment cannot ensure the
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security and safety. A combination of other initiatives is
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required.
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, we need to aware people about the devastating consequences
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rule violations can bring to our lives.
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, the requirements for passing the driving test should be standardised and made more practical, especially in developing countries where people can use advantages of the corruption. It is often noticed that many young people are given driving license without scrutinising their experience and skills.
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should be completely avoided and after a certain period, each driver should be retested.
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, unfit vehicles should not be allowed to run on the roads as these cars cause more
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accidents, according
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Transport Authority report.
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, the
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system of a country should be modernised and more surveillance cameras and speed test cameras should be there. To conclude, punishment to
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rule violators is a good way to make the
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safer, but the combination of other steps would bring more desired results
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deterrent
  • repeat offenses
  • infrastructure improvements
  • public awareness campaigns
  • reckless driving
  • traffic management technologies
  • intelligent traffic lights
  • speed cameras
  • public transportation
  • minimize
  • enhance safety
  • allocate funds
  • road signs
  • road safety
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