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Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in the countryside. What problems are caused by this issue? What can be done to solve this situation?

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Young people are always thirsty for experiences and opportunities. These days, more people in productive age are migrating to big cities in the search of better life quality, leaving the elders to live in the
countryside
.
This
 essay will examine the causes of
this
 problem and suggest a way to resolve
this
.
Firstly
, housing problem in
big city
Suggestion
a big city
the big city
big cities
 is commonly
occurred
Suggestion
occurring
 due to the urbanization. There
is
Suggestion
are
 limited spaces to live in the city,
consequently
 many migrated people move into the town and stay in improper places.
For instance
, there are plenty of slum areas in Jakarta that full of citizens from
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 provinces. They live in crowded places because there is no enough area to accommodate them.
In contrast
, fewer people that living in
countryside
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the countryside
 means a slower pace of
economy
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economic
 growth there.
This
 will hamper the development of the rural area.
Nevertheless
, both issues can be solved by opening more business areas in the
countryside
.
This
 will attract the youth to live there. One of the examples is Japan, in that country, business districts are distributed to relatively smaller cities to ensure the job availability in each city. As there are plenty of careers, the economy will flourish. To conclude, housing problem in cities and low rate of economic growth in
countryside
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the countryside
 are the results of young people’s urbanization. The central of business openings in the
countryside
 can tackle these issues by providing more careers and developing the economy.
Therefore
, youth will be convinced that they can get prosperous
lives even
Accept comma addition
lives, even
 if they stay in the
countryside
.
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