The best way to reduce traffic accidents is to raise the age limit for younger drivers and to lower the age limit for elderly ones. Do you agree or disagree?
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the number of injuries and deaths they cause. A better regulative approach is required for Linking Words
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, there are other, more practical ways to deal with Linking Words
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Last
but not least, safer and wider roads should be constructed to make for easier and more comfortable driving.
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, the elderly with vision problems or other important health issues should be excluded from driving. Linking Words
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age
, which is why other measures are needed for reducing dangerous driving.
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Ensure that all points directly relate to the topic and prompt. Make sure to address the opposing viewpoint for a more comprehensive argument.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs discussing different solutions, and a conclusion summarizing the key points. Consider using transitions to improve the flow between paragraphs.
task response
Good use of examples to support arguments and suggestions for reducing traffic accidents.
coherence and cohesion
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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