In some high schools, part of the curriculum requires students to participate in community work such as helping the elderly or disabled. In what way do children benefit from this? Do you think it should be part of the curriculum?

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Nowadays, there has been lots of researches and studies to make some changes in high schools syllables in order to have more integration of students in community activities like paying more attention to old people or disabled

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deaf and dumb individuals. Overall, as much as students take part in social activities no matter the type or

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in general. Having

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a more social activity

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programs in high schools lessens has a wide variety of advantages for

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the young generation

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of all, students will have a sense of being an important

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for others

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of helping others and will bring a feeling of self-confidence while they have already solved the issue someone else tackled with.

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, a bidirectional relation will be

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while it will create a huge positive feeling aiding other individuals, even if

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people

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could have a closer relation between members. Having emphasize on human being values and cultural aspect of the

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, could be one of the most important results of

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activities that would bring a massive imagination for students that each

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others must always be under their attention. To be concluded with, since many personal habits and acts are based on what they have learned in their younger years and the most refer to their school studies, I opine that trying to teach younger taking part in community

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a positive effect

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and definitely should be part of the school

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In some high schools, part of the curriculum requires students to participate in community work such as helping the elderly or disabled. In what way do children benefit from this? Do you think it should be part of the curriculum?

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their level of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

Some people think that we should replace old buildings and houses in cities with more modern buildings. Other people think we should protect old buildings. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people think that it is more important to plant trees in open areas of town and cities than to build more housing . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Overall, men are more satisfied with local conditions than women.