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Research has shown that spending less time in the office can reduce the use of energy (for example, electricity, gas). Thus some companies close for some days a week. Do this advantage of this development outhweight the disadvantage.

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Inspired by the realisation that energy consumption can be checked by reducing the time spent by
employees
 in offices, many companies have adopted strategies like reducing the number of days in a month.
However
, some people feel that
such
 a plan can have a negative impact on the performance of businesses and the welfare of
employees
.
Firstly
, there would be a substantial reduction in expenses in terms of electricity consumption, water usage and fuel costs.
Moreover
, with the reduced working
hours
 and longer leisure time it is likely that the productivity of
employees
 would improve, compensating for the
hours
 lost.
For example
, the number of days in a week has been reduced from six to five in many government posts in India.
While
 it has substantially cut down costs in terms of lighting and running of job machinery, the work completed in a similar duration has not been seriously affected.
Similarly
, the commuting of
employees
 and movement of vehicles has been reduced, resulting in substantial fuel savings.
Secondly
, critics believe that having 32
hours
 of job
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 affect output and reduce the earning capacity of
employees
.
This
 would mean that losing a considerable number of man-
hours
 at the place would affect the performance of companies.
Moreover
, the loss of wages
due to
 fewer
hours
 can discourage workers. After considering both views, from a broader perspective, the substantial energy
saving
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 achieved by modern companies should be given greater prominence.
Moreover
, the drawbacks can be minimized by introducing alternative methods like telecommuting, where
employees
 do not come to the office, but handle it from home using modern telecommunication systems. In short,
although
 there are minor disadvantages to
this
 system, shorter
hours
 can have greater benefits to individuals and society by saving the depleting resources of the world.

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