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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

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Increasing population is a big issue
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in
 the metro cities. More and more people are coming with different reasons for the cities and settled there permanently.
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 increasing population requires news houses. The vertical growth of the cities is almost done due to
leaps
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leap
 and bounds construction of residential properties. Now the only way to these new homes on the outskirt of the city. Some people believe it is better to preserve the countryside
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 rather than planning new colonies there. In my opinion, it is good to expand a city horizontally rather construction with high rise buildings. Cities are growing congested day by day due to the increasing pressure of population.
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, villages are lack of basic needs for electricity, water and education. People coming to cities for better prospects of life. So there is a need to develop a plan that fulfils the demand for shelter for the cities and maintain the natural green atmosphere of the countryside
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. The main advantage of planning the residential
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 in the outskirts is
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developing
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area
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. As people started to live in that the electricity and water supply have to be maintained by the government. The transport facilities from the city to villages become improved.
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 decrease the trend of migration to cities as the new employment opportunities will create in their villages. In conclusion, to increase the basic facilities
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 the rural areas and to decrease the crowd in the
cities the government
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cities, the government
 should have to plan new accommodations with some restrictions to maintain the natural environment of that
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Ecological benefits
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Sustainable development
  • Eco-friendly building materials
  • Green architecture
  • Government policies
  • Urban sprawl
  • Infrastructure
  • Smart planning
  • Agricultural lands
  • Rural areas
  • Population growth
  • Environmental sensitivity
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