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in many countries people are moving away from rural areas and towards urban areas. why do you think that is? what problems can this cause?

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Most of the countries a quite number of communities depart from the countryside and shifted to the
town
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. In my opinion,
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 is a very big problem for most of the countries. People are leaving the
village
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 and shifted to the main
town
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. People do not earn sufficient
money
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 to live in rural areas. So, they think if they are coming to the main
town
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, they can easily income more
money
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.
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 is the main reason people are leaving rural areas and settled down in the urban
area
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. There are a lot of problems people are moving away from the
village
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 to the
town
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. Most of the companies are situated in the city. That company there are more opportunities to get work. So, people do not think twice before leaving the rural
area
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. They think they can earn more
money
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 than in the
village
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area
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. But when they are coming they get a job, but do not earn much
money
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. In
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 case, they cannot go to his previous place. They are leaving on the slam. All of
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 reason, the population has over exceeded and the cities of most countries faced a lot of pressure.
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, many environmental disasters are another big reason people have left the
village
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. Sometimes, causes of environmental disaster peoples are departing from their leaving place forcefully and they come to the city and work as a driver, a rickshaw puller or day labourer.
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, a person I know him, he lives in Rangpur. He is a farmer. He has a lot of
land
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, but the
land
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 has some problems. Due to floods, his
land
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 was salty and he can not grow any crops. His only one
land
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 left where he has some nut tree. In
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 situation, he is moving to his
village
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 and come into the city with his family. Now he sells nuts and he lives in a slum. To conclude, to overcome
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 problem the government should take necessary steps. Many job opportunities created in rural areas. I think people should reduce the dependency to live in the capital and think twice before they leave the rural
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.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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