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Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions.

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Introduction
These days,
quality
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 of human
life
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 is in decline.
This
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 is mainly because of the sedentary lifestyle of people and increasing pollution all around the world especially in metropolitan cities. There are a number of solutions which should be implemented to deal with
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 growing concern.
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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, the reason for the decrease in
quality
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 of
life
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 is people's desk-bound job.
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, people have to sit long hours in the offices in order to complete their work. Due to increasing competition, employees have the fear of losing their jobs,
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 the majority of working population stretch their limits to work till late nights or whenever employer demands.
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,
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 professionals hardly get time for exercises and
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, they become obese and more prone to illness.
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, it is
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 due to the increasing pollution in metro cities. There is a rapid growth of private vehicles in big cities, because of lack of public transport, which is causing pollution, and everybody’s
life
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 is getting affected by it.
Body paragraph 2
There are two effective solutions to sustain or improve the
quality
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 of human lives. One way to improve
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 is by educating people about the benefits of yoga and exercise. Government should invest in more parks and people should be encouraged to take time out of their busy schedule to use these parks for morning-evening walks and other activities. Another method of dealing with
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 problem, is by improving the public transport facilities in all the major cities. Availability of cheap and comfortable public transports,
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 as metro, will make people choose those over own vehicles.
Conclusion
In conclusion, motivating people to incorporate exercise into their daily
life
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 and improved public transport are effective in dealing with
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 issue. If these solutions are implemented,
quality
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 of
life
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 would improve.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overpopulation
  • Strained resources
  • Commute times
  • Economic stress
  • Community events
  • Affordable housing
  • Environmental regulations
  • Green spaces
  • Urban environments
  • Socialize
  • Foster
  • Tackle
  • Strategies
  • Implementing
  • Pollution
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