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Computer games are very popular in all ages and nationalities. Parents think is has little educational value and it will be harmful for children. What is your opinion and give example based on your own experience.

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In the twenty
first
 century
computer
 games are boosting on the same wavelength with technological marvels.
As a result
, online games are very popular not only among teenagers and among adults too in spite of all nations. Most of parents tend to consider that video games have no educational impact and it is harmful for teens. From my point of view games on a
computer
 have useful and at the same time detrimental influences. I think it depends on type of games, which individuals play. Undoubtedly
,
Accept space
,
there are a lot of beneficial electronic games
such
 as sudoku. These computerized games facilitate adolescents mental thinking process, critical understanding and reflection. To demonstrate I am obsessed with sudoku. Thanks to
this
 video game I have developed my mathematical skills. Now I calculate faster comparing with my past skills. Another good example in
this
 case is I have found some new friends, who are interested in
this
 amusement too. It can
also
 be argued that computerized games have detrimental impacts. The most familiar example is it is time-consuming. Most of youngsters tend to waste their time with
this
 type of enjoyment. Another consideration is electronic games can cause extremely badly on kids' psychological well-being. As an example
,
Accept space
,
most games on a
computer
 are related to war and fighting
such
 as warcraft and free fire. Playing
this
 type of games offsprings are exposed to stress
,
Accept space
,
anxiety and violence. Interest in
computer
 games is increasing among adolescents and adults in spite of all nations. Progenitors suppose that the games have destructive effects and own instructive worth. From what has been discussed above, one can consider that arcade game can cause beneficially or detrimentally. It depends on an individual's preference.
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