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Some people believe that to become successful in sports one should have a natural talent. Others think that perseverance and practice are a crucial part to success. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #sports #talent #perseverance #practice #part #success
Playing a
sport
 is fun! But it is
also
 hard work and discipline. While natural talent does give one an edge over the other, success has no short cuts. It is true,
practice
 does make perfect. The more of it one has the better the individual becomes at the
sport
. Natural talent makes
practice
 for the
sport
 a lot easier,
for instance
 being good at basketball encourages an individual to
practice
 out of sheer love for the
sport
.
This
 may be harder to do when practising comes out of duty rather than interest or being great at the game.
However
, practicing with perseverance and dedication helps one develop a love for the
sport
 as well despite not being as good at it as someone with a flare for it. I am of the strong opinion that patience, perseverance and
practice
 are virtues that will ensure success.

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