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Some people think that there should be some strict controls about noise. Others think that they could just make as much noise as they want. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Noise
pollution
 is increasing globally. Many people
argues
Suggestion
argue
have argued
are arguing
 that
noise
 should be overcome by strict rules and regulations.
However
,
Accept space
,
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 thinks that they should have the right to make
noise
 as much as they want. I strongly opine that
noise
pollution
 causes many hurdles in daily life
activities but
Accept comma addition
activities, but
this
 essay will discuss both the views equally.
Firstly
, with the rapid increase in population,
noise
pollution
 is increasing day by day.
Noise
 in the residential areas and workplaces is overwhelming throughout the world.
For instance
, modern marriage halls and marquee are widely
spreaded
distribute or disperse widely
spread
 and build near communities. These halls are equipped with high frequency speakers and woofers. So, society faces
alot
Suggestion
a lot
 of problems mainly for managing their times for work and education.
On the other hand
, it is believed by some people the
noise
 is the sign of showing joy and pleasure.
For example
, when people are engaged in the parties, festivals and events they used to make
noise
.
This
 enhances their level of amusement. Along with
this
, it elevated the ratio of stress, communication difficulties, fatigue due to less sleep and much more. In my opinion, every kind
pollution
 is injurious to health.
Although
, some people believe that they must be in power to make
noise
 whenever they
want but
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want, but
this
 is
invalid point
Suggestion
an invalid point
 in my view.
Noise
pollution
 is
major threat
Suggestion
a major threat
 to serious health problem by effecting hearing ability, disturb educational and
bussiness
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
 routine to
great extent
Suggestion
a great extent
. To conclude all,
noise
Suggestion
the noise
 is detrimental to our surrounding. Some people go with the fact that there should be strict order to control the
noise but
Accept comma addition
noise, but
 other thinks that they should have a free hand to make
noise
.
This
 essay has discussed how
noise
 is damaging our daily life and to what extent people are free to make noises in any situation.It is recommended that high administration should make the rules to cope with these alarming situations and save the nation in a representative way.
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