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In the request for development, many countries allow their natural environment to be affected. Such a strategy is well worthwhile, and economic development should always be placed ahead of the environment. Argue both sides, and give your opinion.

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The past decades
saw
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have seen
 many countries strived for economic growth which took a heavy toll on the
environment
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. Some maintain that
environment
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 should be placed ahead of economic growth. I
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 believe
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, and my reasons are twofold.
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 of all, it is undeniable that
overexploitation
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 came a cost of climate change with growing carbon emission. Extreme weather has contributed to disastrous ruins in several places. One obvious example of
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 is a
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 in Australia - the
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 lasted for a few months, millions acres engulfed by the blade, and millions residents evacuated.
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, it is pressing that certain policies should be made for government in term of environmental
protection
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. Admittedly, entrepreneurs often claim that environmental
protection
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 to certain extend confines development greatly for those developing countries.
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, Paris agreement constrains carbon emission, several
countries raising
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countries, raising
 expenditure to reduce a dependence on fossil fuel.
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, in view of both development and our
environment
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, it seems that those actions are necessary and urgent. Equally essential to environmental
protection
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 is
preservation
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the preservation
 of endangered animals. One compelling example of
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 is can be seen in polar bear;
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, some researches predicted that polar bear will be wiped out within a few decades. By way of conclusion, in terms of
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 generation,
environment
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protection
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 and preservation outweigh the economic exploitation,
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 it is necessary to increase
funds
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funding
 on those practices.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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