You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are currently attending a course which is not the same as per the description in the admission brochure. Write a letter to the headmaster. In your letter, state which course you are enrolled in provide details about the noted differences suggest what actions would you like him to take

#minutes #course #description #admission #brochure #headmaster #differences #actions

Dear Sir/Madam, I am

Mr.

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Ajay Parab studying in

first

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the first

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year of Analytics

course

in your reputed institute. I took the admission after checking a

course

structure provided in the brochure on your college website. I was really fascinated with opportunities to learn in the institute.

However

, after spending two months in the college, I feel

course

details in the admission brochure doesn't match with actual

course

delivery. There were

plethora

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of languages mentioned in the

brouchure

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brochure

including but not limited to python, r,

sql

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SQL

However

, in actual

teaching

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it only

consits

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consists

microsoft

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Microsoft

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excel,

sql

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SQL

, c++ and

overview

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an overview

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of machine learning.

Also

, in the

brochure

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it was mentioned that students will have practical learning on Industrial projects.

However

, there are neither industrial projects nor academic projects.

This

will not help me to get

secured

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a secured

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job after my

course

completion. I request you to check with

concerned

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faculty for

course

delivery. And make sure our career doesn't get

squander

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. Your

Failthfully

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Faithfully

, Ajay

Sun Jan 19 2020

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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Grammar mistakes
 

6 paragraphs

162 words

4.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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The Closing

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