Today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? What measures can be taken to overcome this epidemic.

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It is fact that numerous of masses are overweight as
compare
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compared
to the past. In my opinion,
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is happening owing to the lack of exercises and unhealthy
food
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choices.
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,
although
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overweight is
big issue
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a big issue
of
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in
today's society but it can be solved by aware the people about healthy lifestyle as well as
importance
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the importance
of body workout. Discussing the reasons, the most common one is unhealthy
food
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.
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is because nowadays people are leading busy schedules, both the
genders
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gender
male female are the employees since they have not enough time for preparing
food
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at home for themselves.
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, tend to eat
readymade
made for purchase and immediate use
ready-made
ready made
meals including junk
food
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which is unhealthy for them as they intake exceed levels of calories.
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, 85% working people of India order the prepared
food
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for themselves. The other cause is
low level
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the low level
a low level
of exercises.
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, folks nowadays after their jobs like to rest and spend time on technological gadgets
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, they
not give
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don't give
aren't giving
importance to
exercises
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exercise
even they do not do walking. There some several steps which can be taken to tackle
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problem.
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, governments should create some
advertisements
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advertisement
compaign
a race between candidates for elective office
campaign
campaigns
regarding
nutrients
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nutrient
values of
food
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and impact of junk
food
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on once health.
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will make mortals understand about the calories they intake in their everyday life which lead to the problem of overweight.
Ultimately people
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Ultimately, people
will control on eating junk foods.
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, masses should
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awared
(sometimes followed by 'of') having or showing knowledge or understanding or realization or perception
aware
about the importance of exercises.
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, gyms and stadiums should be provided the sake of people's health by the higher authorities. In conclusion, it is clear that today's more folks are victim of obesity due to the
unhealth
not in or exhibiting good health in body or mind
unhealthy
diet and lack of exercises. But
i
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I
think
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problem can be solved by aware the people.
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