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Some people think that watching sport is a waste of leisure time. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #sport #waste #leisure #time
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In
this
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 agile
world it
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world, it
 is hard to get some leisure
time
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, should an individual
spend
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spends
 precious, hard earned free
time
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 in watching
sport
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 has sparked a series of heated arguments between critics and experts.
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, in my opinion I strongly believe that watching
sport
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 is far better than watching daily soaps and cartoons if one decides to spend their leisure
time
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 in front of the television. In
this
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 essay, I will provide illustrations from The Times Newspaper and Government of USA. Since the beginning of
time
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, it
is observed
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has been observed
 clearly that peoples’ behaviour reflects on what they perceive. Watching
sport
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 not only entertaining, but it
also
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 secondarily injects teaches some of the key aspects of life like
team work
cooperative work done by a team (especially when it is effective)
teamwork
, sportsmanship, honesty, discipline and so on. In a recent survey from Government of USA shows that 90% of Americans gained the valuable art of team work just by watching football.
Sport
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 not only teaches positive things about the
perception but
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perception, but
 it
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 acts as a key player when it comes to bringing motivation. In today’s era, because of
recent boom
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the recent boom
a recent boom
 in technology sector people are getting lazy and started developing progressive hatred towards physical work. In monthly The Times Newspaper’s research column it was mentioned that among the group of part-
time
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 professional athletes, 85% of them got
motivation
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the motivation
 to pursue sports as secondary career just by watching sports. To summarise all the arguments and discussions, it can be clearly concluded that
instead
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 spending leisure
time
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 in watching daily soaps and cartoons, watching
sport
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 not only entertaining but it
also
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 provides benefits to the ones watching it.
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