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Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions

#quality #life #cities
Metropolitan cities have advanced facilities as compared to the smaller, that’s why the people are trying to move there to avail better facilities. Different people are aiming to settle in large cities due to different needs and wants, which may be education, better opportunities or luxuries, due to which the population in big cities is increasing day by day. The increasing population is putting an additional burden in each sector which includes but not limited to academic institutes, hospitals, roads and municipality, accommodation and other services. The additional load on the same facilities are definitely affecting the
quality
 of life negatively. The huge gap in demand and supply of resources
are effecting
Suggestion
is affecting
are affecting
 the
quality
 of product and are resulting in price hike as well. I would like to quote here the example of Qatar; since the developmental projects have been launched in Qatar and the immigrants started coming in to Qatar, the developers have started to build small apartments compared to the old one and have increased the rents, which is a clear decrease in the
quality
 of living. There are
difference
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different
differentiating
 factors involve in the decrease of
quality
 of life in the major cities, but the few main reasons are
lake
the state of needing something that is absent or unavailable
lack
 of facilities and opportunities in the small cities. The governments can take different steps to reduce the population in the major cities which includes but not limited to birth control campaigns, providing the similar facilities in small cities and townships, encouraging people to live in the small cities by providing them tax relief and some free facilities like community clubs, and should invest in small cities and townships to create
such
 opportunities which not only retain the local residents but
also
 attract the public from the major cities, to reduce the burden on the large cities. The government should
also
 develop new cities to facilitate the citizens.

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